does universities and colleges should financially support the sport and social activities like their support to libraries and classes
Nothing can play the important role that education plays in our life. Through education , students study and learn information and knowledge that will help them to be ready for their future career. In colleges and universities, students receive higher education. Moreover, students join many social clubs and sportive teams to be socially active and enjoy healthy life. Some people believe that the budget directed to support social and sport activities in colleges must be equal to that budget for libraries and classes. From my perspective, I support this point of view because of the enormous benefits of these activities on the life of students.
First and foremost, sport and social activities in colleges keep students mentally and physically healthy. The lifestyle of students is very unhealthy because they sit down for a long time in their classes. In addition, they don't have enough time to eat healthy food. Therefore, sport activities in colleges will have a positive effect on students' health. For example, in the first year of college, I gained a lot of weight and I became lazy, ugly and I lost my self confidence. Fortunately, I saw an ad about the new opening of the gym room in my college, and I joined it immediately. After a few weeks I lost a lot of kilograms,and I became more cheerful and happy. So , thanks to the university that spends money wisely in supporting such sport activities.
Second but with equal importance, sport and social activities assist students in more focusing on their classes and being more successful. During those activities we speak with new people, exchange our experience in life, and relax from our stressful events that we confront every day. For instance, when my friend lost her mother in a horrific accident, she was in her first year of college. She felt very sad and sorrowful to the extent that she couldn't concentrate in her classes. But, I advised her to join the sport and social activities in the college to escape from her stressful situation. I can't forget her transformation from a depressed sad young girl into a happy, healthy and energetic girl.Moreover, she got higher grades than she used to get before. From my friend’s experience, the financial support of the sport and social activities in colleges and universities is very important to increase the productivity of students.
All in all, when universities and colleges dedicat adequate financial support to sport and social activities equal to the monetary support for libraries and classes, students will be more mentally and physically healthy. Plus they will pay attention more in their classes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07603686636 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81575442503 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493087557604 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6037079855 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7826086957 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8695652174 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327823921433 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959899674232 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108777933955 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227016418179 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541686676652 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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