Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can doubt the important role that the media plays in our lives because it is one of the ways that people use to entertain and to explore the surrounding world. Some people believe that TV and movies have huge disadvantages, especially for youngsters, and others have an opposite point of view. In my opinion, I think that the benefits that young people gain from watching television surpass its negative effect, and that for some reasons which I will explain in deep details in the upcoming paragraphs.
First and foremost, the television is a good source of knowledge and information because it displays a lot of informative programs that speak about almost all fields. To support my view, I will clarify it with an example from my personal life. When I was in high school, I was still living in my country, and it was hard to take lessons with a tutor to explain hard subjects because my parents couldn't afford the expenses to pay for a private teacher. So, I was frustrated because I had many problems to understand chemistry and biology. Fortunately, my friend told me that there were some programs on the television that explain and simplify the high school chemistry and biology curriculum. Therefore, I watched those programs and I followed all of their instructions on how to answer chemistry and biology harsh questions. In my experience, without the assistance of the television's programs, I couldn't understand the chemistry and the biology when I was a high school student.
Second of all, movies kill our free time and help us to escape from our stressful situations. In case of young people that suffer from a lot of unused time, television plays an important role in their lives because it helps them to entertain and enjoy alone or with their friends. For instance, my two teenage daughters feel very bored from staying home during this time because we were in quarantine since March 2020 due to the uncontrolled wide spread of the fatal virus, Covid 19. But when my daughters started to watch movies and follow some entertaining programs, they became to a certain extent happier than before. Moreover, they decide to watch programs that explain the culture of other countries like India and Egypt. Thus, those shows were like traveling without moving. As you can see, despite of all the stressful circumstances that we live through, movies and TV shows help us to overcome this hard situation.
All in all, the advantages of movies and TV shows exceed their disadvantages for youngsters because they are good sources of knowledge and also they help people to overcome and escape from their real anxious lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89732142857 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67031092334 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506696428571 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2546294028 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.888888889 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8888888889 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143546147665 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441729833468 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406035023449 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894929054024 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583236002292 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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