Educating children is more difficult today than it was in them past as they spend much of their time on phone ,social networking media and playing online games..do you agree or disagree
There is no shortage of opinion on how vital education is in building one’s future. No one can deny that today we face lot of obstacles in the process of educating children.It’s my firm belief that educating children is more difficult today than it was in the past as they spend much of their time on phone, games, and social networking websites. I have reason behind this claim that I will discuss in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, I believe that spending time on internet,phone and online games act as a distraction for children. Their keen interest in these activities has resulted in lack of their interest and concentration in education. Technology has made these devices so attractive to children that they don’t want to leave these things aside and concentrate on studies.Eventually, causing a lot of time wastage. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. When I was in the hostel for higher studies,i misused my freedom to use phone as I was not being watched over by my parents. I kept spending lot of time on phone even during my exam days. This bad habit of mine impaired my final results as I couldn’t prepare well for exam. So, I believe these distractions act as hurdles in the way of educating children nowadays.
Secondly, using phone ,internet and playing online games can impair the thinking and creativity level of children. These devices doesnt give them opportunity to expand their knowledge and think out of the box. Traditional method of enhancing creativity by reading books has been replaced by these modern gadgets. Nowadays,children only knows and understand what they see on phone and internet and can’t think beyond that. Their thinking power have become limited. Drawing from my personal experience, I remember my parents always made sure I played mental games with them to increase my thinking power. But now when I look at my children ,I don’t see them playing those mental games as they are always occupied with their phones.Their knowledge and creativity level has been damaged to such extent that they are not able to perform well in the mental quiz held in their schools. Therefore, their decline in the knowledge by these gadgets has made the process of educating difficult.
So,in the lights of the reasons mentioned above ,I strongly agrees that social media and phones has made educating children a difficult task today than it was before .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97087378641 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83087402905 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529126213592 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2871126408 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372009291848 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100055035249 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1052761873 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246720001464 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074237512407 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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