The entertainment and activities should differ from job activities.
Planning for periods when people are not working at their jobs has a crucial impact on people's lives. . However, there is still much dispute about whether this time should be spent on activities differing from the people’s occupations or should be similar to them. In this respect, some argue that having similar employment and entertainment activities would improve people's efficiency. On the other hand, others, including me, believe that people will benefit from fun activities that are distinct from their jobs.
To begin with, there should be compelling factors that people should choose different activities out their job environment. To be more precise, researchers from different fields of study would have to agree on the factor. This central factor is creativity, benefiting both employees and their managers in their workplaces. To demonstrate its effectiveness, this fact must be examined. This is best achieved by relying on research tests. One of the detailed experiments was carried out by a well-known psychological institution in Iran. Two groups of workers have been invited to participate. A group was asked to have activities similar to the ones it had in its work. The other group, however, had different fun after their work was completed. The test results were overwhelming. The latter group showed great creativity in their main tasks after having experienced different activities that they had to work with. Therefore, if they had not done other activities when they were away from the workplace, the creativity would not have been revealed by the group.
Also, during various activities, people browse through their daily lives, another progressive factor is hidden, however, is so productive. It would be good for people's social abilities. It would also give people a better work experience. They find more friends, and that would be beneficial when people are in difficult circumstances. Think about my experience. I work out six days a week. It's not because I can improve my muscular activities, but for good reason, find and have fun with other people in different jobs. In addition, one of them, when I was in difficult circumstances, lent me money. However, the more time I spent with them, the more free I felt of the stress that contributes greatly to my social life.
To sum up, not only would people improve their creativity with the different entertainment they follow after work, they would also enhance the social capacities contributing to their daily lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ties contributing to their daily lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, in addition, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22084367246 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83386764041 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508684863524 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.920319735 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9230769231 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248095979162 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665412193272 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954989119471 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164953506828 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132921147127 0.0645574589148 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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