Every day on the radio, newspapers and T.V, we hear, see or read about many problems in the world.
write the influence of few problems about our life
Every day on the radio, newspapers and T.V, we hear, see or read about many problems in the world. One of major problem is exists hate between a lot of people from all over the world. most of the times we can't control about the feeling hate, but we need to avoid this feeling because we are living together on earth and this no matter the different between us. From this point we need to start take care to each other without look on the religions, colors, and gender.
this major problem reflected on our life in many situations. First, we have many different religions lives together, for examples in Israel. In some places in Israel the Muslims, Jewish and Christian they are a neighbors. In most of the places they have a good relationship between them, but sometimes the hate destroyed all the relationship and fight began. In my opinion we can't let the religion kill our peace; we need to get each other no matter the religions they believed.
Second, all the people are different, some of the people have white color and some have black color. this different make some people feel that they better from other, but in the reality this is not true. For example, in the old USA was exists discrimination, and the afro Americans feel racism from the white people only because the different on the color, this reflected on the job place, at the streets and other places. All the racism they are results of the feeling hate, in my opinion, the color of the people no means anything about the person, and everyone should get treated equally.
To conclusion, we can to make our world better place, but we must to improve our control about the feeling hate. Of course this problem is not the only problem, but I am thinking that we should begin to solve the problem between us and the other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...very day on the radio, newspapers and T.V, we hear, see or read about many proble...
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...ll over the world. most of the times we cant control about the feeling hate, but we ...
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...n the religions, colors, and gender. this major problem reflected on our life in ...
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...life in many situations. First, we have many different religions lives together, for examples ...
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... Muslims, Jewish and Christian they are a neighbors. In most of the places they have a good...
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...d all the relationship and fight began. In my opinion we cant let the religion kil...
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...nship and fight began. In my opinion we cant let the religion kill our peace; we nee...
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... no matter the religions they believed. Second, all the people are different, so...
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... white color and some have black color. this different make some people feel that th...
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...everyone should get treated equally. To conclusion, we can to make our world ...
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... to make our world better place, but we must to improve our control about the feeling h...
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...e the problem between us and the other.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, for example, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1484.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59442724458 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29578201785 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467492260062 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8539947727 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9333333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2721826761 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121511598821 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188603261812 0.0737576698707 256% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195389872448 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128867872746 0.0645574589148 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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