Formal education restrains spirits and minds rather than set free
After the surpassing crucial areas of primitive ages, one term is very associated road to the enhancement of development that is nothing but education which is the mainstay to remove all darkness and embellish our propensity in the light of civilized society. With the passage of time, this precious education is now turned to a formal education which is specious matter. Which is why, I do believe that formal education is now an ineffective matter which should be put back the former light. That’s why I will uphold logics against the above statement and substantiate it.
To embark on, what we mean by education is that it must arouse creativity and innovativeness. But it is a matter of regret that formal education are failed to underpin this and it is now a conventional tool. We, students don’t get any touch of creativity molding. Take for instance, I had a course of social science in the school level that course was a nominal to me. Even if I did not discern the usefulness of having that course. So far, I remembered that every day we memorized three or four question rather than the using that knowledge in a practical manner. Moreover, using social-science knowledge we can easily imagine what will be our future culture and society. In contrast, the class just taught me how to memorize society. Besides math class means rife practical scenario of uses like parabolic door of primitive ages, echo in the deepest sea, going to international math-Olympiad program etc. Undoubtedly it is the maximum limitations of that course.
Furthermore, due to conventional education the effect of it is very depressing. Here if I refer the whole scenario of my country, it will be apparent how loss is we now facing. For example, in my college there are lots of arts and science background student whose first and foremost focus was to be an illuminated man. On the other hand they get only limited atmosphere to enhance their creativity. As a result, they are now predominant in the society as a burden. My close friend studied arts in the college. As college didn’t provide ample opportunities to extract out talent from him, so despite a lawyer, he doesn’t solve any critical case having huge experience. Actually his experiences are not grown up like Harvard University student. Besides my friend who studied physics in the university level, now he is a college teacher having none of papers. Especially he doesn’t understand how a bridge is made by the knowledge of physics. In the long run, they are becoming thief, dacoit, or wicked person of the locality.
Last but not least, formal education means lots of subjects without practical learning which also narrow the channel of influencing the extra-curricular studies. As students are always busy they will not have time to ponder about different tasks like volleyball, cricket, blood donating club etc. From my personal experience, in the onset of my class eight I only knew we had to finish my 12 subject’s fixed portion in between 6 months and every day I went to school to take a vigilance eye on those questions. In lieu of it how I would think the life like a leader of scout. So pathetic was the situation. Moreover, my parents also didn’t perceive why I would go to rover scout. Here it is referable that the problem is not atmosphere , rather formal education structure was a problem.
To wrap it up, it is hard to provide this open ended question with exact logic. Although some may oppose my view, I tried uttermost to substantiate my point against the statement. No doubt it is observed that today’s world is more focused to practical education in lieu of formal as only by practical education, a student can dispel the overall demand of this society which is a burning question at present. For sure, it is apparent and quite lucid to be intelligible that formal education loses its appeal in this modern path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, as to, for example, for instance, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 15.1003584229 245% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 52.1666666667 171% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3265.0 1977.66487455 165% => OK
No of words: 667.0 407.700716846 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89505247376 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08196252842 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88343250506 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 349.0 212.727598566 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52323838081 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1046.7 618.680645161 169% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8249461812 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6944444444 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5277777778 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118817910586 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0285182444194 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047981249726 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728288677591 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331276816733 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 86.8835125448 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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