A friend wishes to purchase a gift for his brother who is graduating from college. He has enough money to purchase a new cell phone or a gift voucher for an experience such as horseback riding, a hot-air balloon ride, etc. He is of two minds and has asked for your advice as to which one he should choose. Compare the two options and explain which choice you think better. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
people love buying a present for their relatives or friends on their birthdays’.While some people prefer to buy a concrete gift such as a new telephone, others prefer to buy a gift which is much more sentimental such as horseback riding and a hot-air balloon ride. The both gift options have some pros and cons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, buying a gift a cell phone like creates an advantage because cell phone makes much easier people’s both daily life and business life; moreover, it is a fact that people use their phones to do lots of operations related to their both daily life and business life such as shopping on the internet and sending an email about documents. Therefore, purchasing a cell phone for someone could be beneficial for these people. On the other hand, buying a gift buy like horseback riding or a hot-air balloon ride does not have the advantage of usage in life like cell phone.
Second of all, a new cell phone which you purchased as a gift has a lifetime, and it gets out of order after a while, approximately in five years. Thus, it is forgotten by the owner, for it does not have a permanence. Whereas, a gift such as horseback riding and a hot-air balloon ride creates beautiful memories for the human who is the owner of this present. When he or she remembers these memories, a human who bought a gift come to his or her mind because memories are much more long-lasting than having a short life gift such as a cell phone in order to create dramatically emotional changes in people.
Finally, even though the both gift options have advantages and disadvantages, I choose to purchase a gift such as horseback riding or a hot-air balloon ride. In my opinion, the purpose of the buying a gift to someone is to remind the person that it is important for you. Besides, this is the most beautiful way to remind you this person to give beautiful memories.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, mind you, such as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66860465116 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71089258649 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459302325581 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.6819542316 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.833333333 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4166666667 5.45110844103 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366496156531 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147599324747 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835039064085 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236875580661 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532591670283 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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