A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either * to go on vacation * to buy a car Your friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend's two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
The unexpected money, we may sometimes obtain in lives, has been valued and triggers a heated discussion over how we should spend it if we have one.The accidental money, in many people's views, should be spend on buying a new car.Contrary to these people's opinions is my perspective that we should use the money to go on a vacation, due to the contributions to our happiness and memory leave after it.
What must be prioritized is that the money we spend on going on a vacation would bring us happiness that we could not get in normal life.To begin with, going on a vacation may help us release the stress in daily life.To be more specific, travel in a different city let the bad emotion accumulated before gradually release; however, if we choose to buy a car, we would need to take care of the vehicle and the works may even make us more stressful.Moreover, the vacation help us stay away from our work.In detail, when we finished ordering hotel, plane, or the restaurant, we may force to put off the work and focus on the schedule of our plan; in contrast, buying car could make no different as we work all day before.
What is equally worth discussing is that the money spend on vacation give us the unreplaceable memory.Initially, the vacation always entails with some adventure filled with exciting or curiousity.To explain it further, the trip we choose must be some place we have a lot of interest in, whether we had fun or not, impressed us in the end; on the contrary, even if the car could bring us to many space, it had large limit comparing to the train or plane.Additionally, the vacation also gave us a different view of the world.Specifically, if we choose to go abroad, we would have experience the variant lifestyle that have huge different from us; however, the car could only drive to the near city, and we have to spend a lot of effort on it.
Happiness, the joy to our life, could be kindle by having a vacation.Memories, the past scene live in our brain forever, could also be obtained from a trip to the different space.In conclusion, only by spending the money on vacation, can one get the largest benefits from it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, in conclusion, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59635416667 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95203513656 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 96.0 20.1344086022 477% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 200.827506831 48.9658058833 410% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 441.25 100.406767564 439% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 96.0 20.6045352989 466% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.25 5.45110844103 463% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0881294750378 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601105277769 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0272899163929 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601105277769 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272899163929 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 48.2 11.7677419355 410% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -17.5 58.1214874552 -30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 39.5 10.1575268817 389% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.58 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.4 8.01818996416 142% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 10.002688172 285% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 40.4 10.0537634409 402% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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