In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers ao television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefere? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.
Studying at home and studying in a traditional way at school both have advantages. If I have a choice to study at home by using technology or studying at traditional school, I would choose to study at school. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
First of all, if children are studying in a traditional way at school, they are likely to increase their intellectual abilities more, than if they study at home. Most of the kids tend to be destructed by scores of things during the learning process, especially those who are in elementary school. Having a teacher next to the child is crucial to keep him concentrated on the process. My own experience illustrates it very well. When I was at school, very often, it was difficult for me to focus on a learning subject. Sometimes I was looking in a window and started dreaming. This took me away from the topic. Yet my teacher always brought back my attention to the class very carefully and cunningly. To that end, in a school a teacher keeps students focused and this way helps them to pursue studying.
Second, education in school can help to children develop skills, which are indispensable in making a successful career. At school kids communicate to each other and learn how to deal with others. In contrast, the students, who stay at home, do not have this opportunity. Having marvelous communicative skills is extremely salient nowadays, especially for those who works in a business setting. Businessmen have to negotiate with their partners and customers every day and ability to perform it effectively can enlarge their chances on outstanding outcomes of bargain, which in turn will lead to advancing through the ranks of a company they work for. This illustrates the value of attending a traditional school by students, where they can excel they outgoing capabilities.
To sum this up, I feel strongly that education at traditional schools is preferable to staying at home and learning by using technology. This is because, at school children learn more and can develop important skills. All things considered, it seems reasonable to assume that traditional education at school is more beneficial.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, so, well, i feel, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93698630137 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90976962007 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531506849315 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7582251823 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8095238095 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.380952381 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269517424995 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860828620745 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121004759028 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205357201865 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138404022512 0.0645574589148 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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