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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain you

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

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I personally disagree with the statement that media pays too much attention to the privat lives of famous people. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
One of the reasons is that it is sometimes crucial to be aware of what particular public figures are. Speaking of recent events in political life of the United States- elections, in order to choose a side to vote for, people had to know what each of candidats represented in terms of personality. This way, media served ar a source of extensive information for that tipe of questions. If voters had not known what lives the candidates lived, they would have difficulties to give preference to the one on of the nominees. Although from the ethical point of view it may seems that politicians have right on private space, society has to be aware of all their affears in the past. To that end, when people know the way a politician they want to vote live, they are likely build more unbiased oppinion about the person.
Another reason is that majority of celebrities start their careers to become famous. Actors and musicians aim to attract attention of the public in case to excel. Threrefore, when they start their professional way, they have to understand that people will be interested in all details of their private life. If press or other media are not willing to know more about of a celebrity, it is doubtfull that he is famous. Even if some public persons claim that media is too extencive in their desire conceal selebtities` personal secrets, they have to be grateful for that, because it proves their popularity. So, famous people have to appreciate media for exaggerated attention.
To sum it up, I feel that television, newspapers, magazines and other sources of mass information do not pay too much attention to the famous people life, but help society to understant them better and appreciate them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rstant them better and appreciate them.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, as to, i feel, speaking of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81172839506 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71160375508 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549382716049 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6840151727 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.933333333 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249719192329 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876440924963 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944495698466 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190560419371 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924595383104 0.0645574589148 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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