In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.
students are the building block for future to any population. they need special attention from the governement and from the parents. alot of changes happened to raise the level of education, hence different views was studied as what is the best technique that can help students getteing better eductation. Some of these idea was to allow students study at home using computers or television, others sayed it is better to keep them at their traditional schools. In my view, I belive that tradiationa school is much better than home for studying. and i have the following reasons that support my idea.
First, in schools either puplic or private, students get better education due to direct contact with the teacher. all teachers prefer to have a direct communicating with students in order to know any weak points that need much effort. However, when students studying at home there is no one supervise them, Moreover, even if students know their weakest point, they lack teaching strategy and they couldn't know how to get the correct information. For example, when I' am preparing for my dental board exam. I was studiyng at home using my laptop, it tooks me almost one year to finish just part one, Meanwhile, my freind he decided to take a course in one of international institue, and he finished his board in three months. when i talk to him how he did that, he told me that he learend vast of critical questions that came on exam and his teachers was focusing on those questions only. This experinece taught me that, whatever we did to study at home, it will not better that studying under supervision of amazing teachers.
seconed, studing at school creat more competetions between students, when students looks to their freinds doing great job, listeniting to their teachers , and doing their homework, each of them will try to do better than other. For instance, my daughter when she came home she gave me all her reports cards and she keeps talking to me about her freinds, which one is better than her and which on she is doing better than him or her. furthermore, when i helped her on her homework, she always told me to be sure about the answer, because she don't want any of her freinds to be better than her. As you can see, studying at home creat a competetive environement for students, hence, most os succeful students are thae one who are studying at school.
In sum, studying at school better than at home even using moderen technology, not because school offer direct conact with the teachers, but it creat competeive environemt for them to do better job. thats why i prefer school study than home study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76805251641 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52786477154 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518599562363 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.043155258 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.684210526 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0526315789 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226379166547 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821491087 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830325466896 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162433446612 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447281075905 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.