In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
People have been debating a lot about causes of increased humans` lifetime. Personally, I think it is because, these days, we have advanced medicine and technology. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, progress in medicine has given people a myriad of of medicaments to treat a variety of ailments. Before the beginning of the last century millions of people worldwide died from numerous infections such as the Plague, tuberculosis and cholera . Nowadays, the mankind has vaccines and antibiotics to prevent and cure these life-threatening illnesses. When people had plenty of medicine to defeat diseases, they could live longer. My own experience is a good exaple of that. When I was a twelve years old child, I was saffering from pneumonia – a higly contageous, dangerous disease, but because I was given antibiotics by doctors in a local children`s hospital, I was successfully cured. Moreover, after the recovery, I was vaccinated from the disease in the same medical facility. As a result, to this day, I have never been contaminated. In this way, the modern medications let me survive the dadly sickness, and became a healthy adult.
Secondly, the contemporary technology has decreased the intensity of people`s manual labor. These days, we have a lot of equipment available to perform physically arduous for human being work, which our ancestors had to accomplish with their hands. If a person does not exposed to an physically exhausting activities, he/she could stay heathy and increase the life expectancy. For instance, I recall teles of my grandfather, how after the World War Two, the sitizens of my country had to reconstuct Russia from ruines. They did not have havy machinery to build new roads, bridges and homes – they had to do it manually. This labor was incredibly hard and resulted in a variety of health problems. On the other hand, the new generation of the Russians use technologycal equipment to construct new towns and cities, and therefore, they are not stressed out by the tremndously difficult labor. This is one of the reasons why my contemporaries have longer lives.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that constant development in medicine and technology let people extend their lives. This is because it contribures to their well-being by providing them with effective drugs for a healing and with helpful tools for work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13520408163 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04751546624 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591836734694 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4699478219 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8181818182 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127476080621 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390265663803 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442643229405 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0789221755758 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152334383349 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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