Your school has enough money to purchase either computers for students or books for the library. Which should your school choose to buy — computers or books? Use specific reasons and examples to support your recommendation
Nowadays, at the time of fast developing technology, being a knowledgeable person in terms of computers is indispensable. Having advanced computer skills can help students to succeed in their studies and to find a good job in the future. Therefore, if my school has enough budget to buy whether computers or books, I would definitely prefer for the institution to purchase the computers.
First of all, having computers at the school will help pupils to improve their academic performance. The computers, connected to the Internet will give students an access to a variety of information, which is pivotal to perform a plenty of school`s projects. Today, on the Internet, students can find answers to almost all questions by barely a single click of the mouse. Moreover, the information on the Internet gets updated constantly. Therefore, the students can use the fresh data in their projects. Although the pupils can obtain the information from books in the library, this process is very time consuming and sometimes, the library may simply lack the necessary book. To that end, by purchasing the computers, the school will help students to accomplish their educational tasks in the best way.
Secondly, by working with the computers, the students will gain crucial skills to excel in the modern world. Today, all employers, when hiring, ask whether a candidate has the computer skills. This is because every contemporary business is equipped with computers. So, if a person wants to get a job of a dream, he has to know how to deal with computers. For example, one of my friends had a hard time with employment for a reason of having no computer skills. Nobody wanted to hire him. Furthermore, even when he applied to work as a librarian, he got a refusal, since working for a modern library requires having basic knowledge in computers. This way, having the computers at the school will help students to build their future.
To conclude, I strongly believe that my school should spend money on purchasing computers instead of buying books for the library. This is because, by that, the institution will give a chance to students to enhance in their studies and gain important for their future skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...cted to the Internet will give students an access to a variety of information, which is p...
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Line 4, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gain important for their future skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01630434783 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84184049863 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502717391304 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4350106354 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259753634205 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798952804642 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085444799405 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185228509197 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559963879733 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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