In general people are living longer now Which of the following do you think accounts for this phenomenon Technological improvements Changes to education systems Improvements to our diets Use specific details and examples in your answer You may choose more

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In general, people are living longer now. Which of the following do you think accounts for this phenomenon?

Technological improvements
Changes to education systems
Improvements to our diets
Use specific details and examples in your answer. You may choose more than one cause.

It is true that people are living longer in the recent times than a couple of decades
ago. This increase in life can be imputed to technological advances, changes to education
systems and improvements our diets and not just to any one of them.
The following passage will illustrate why all the mentioned factor are important.

First, there has been a drastic imporvments in the technology since 10 to 15 years.
These technological advancements paved the way for break through research in the
fields of biology and medicine. Experiments which were thought to be next to impossible
are being performed whose results provide promising solutions. For example, let us take
the case of microscope. Intitially, when it was first developed, people could
magnify microbes to only a certain extent. But as technology advanced, we developed the
electron microscope which facilitates us to closely see the interactions of viruses with
the immunity system so that we are able to develop vaccines and eradicate diseases.

Second, the literacy rate is increasing at an appreciable pace in the recent times.
The nations around the world have recoginsed the importance of education for the
prosperity of the it's people. Hence, the Goverments are implementing schemes that
make education accessible to even the poorest of the poor. It is thourgh education
that people learn to take wise decisions that can save them in life and death situations
or have better family planning etc.

Finally, the technological advancements and access to education made people realise
the affect of different kinds of food on their biological system. This knowledge helps
them have an healthy diet from an early age. Having an healty diet from an early age is
one of the key factors for a long life. Nowadays, people know which foods can increase
cholestrol levels or which foods aggrevate the problems for diabetic patients.
This knowledge makes people to choose their diet accordingly and lead a healthy lifestyle.

Thus I personally feel that technological advances, changes to education
systems and improvements in our diets play an important role as we are able to do
advanced research, take logical decisions and choose a diet that best benifits.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, thus, for example, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31666666667 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88120773716 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594444444444 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2160121204 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.736842105 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.53405017921 595% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247469293361 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668783602854 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058147336031 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0600065531501 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482246582588 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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