A government spend money on all adults after 25-year-old on a training course for the most up-to-date skills at workplace. Do you think it is effective? Why or why not?
With the accelerating advancement of high technology in this information era, an increasing attention has been paid on improve the capabilities of work force to satisfy the explosion of demand. Along with the trend, a controversy has raised up, which is whether it's worthwhile to pay on train all adults workers to learn up-to date skills. Frankly speaking, I believe that weather the implement is effective depends on the capabilities of adults, that's not a shear problem.
Above all, it makes sense when training the adult workers with good degrees. With the guarantee of their graduation with honor, there are no doubt that those adult workers possess strong capabilities of learning, in that case it's easy for them to grasp the advanced knowledge and up-to date skills and practice those new skills into working after they back to their workplace. And accompanied with the well use of skills they learned, the development of technology, increase in output, higher GDP and economic growth come to be possible. Here's an online survey on Sina.com said that most adult workers have become the solid foundation of local economy as their up-to-date skills and wide knowledge scope render the society thrive. Thus without doubt, it's effective to spend money on encouraging adults to train.
However, regarding to the adults without motivation and capabilities, to some degree it's a waste of money to train them for new skills. As for the some with low capabilities of learning, it's quite hard for them to grasp the new knowledge. And to those without working motivation, there's no guarantee that they learn up-to date skills seriously, not mention to practice those skills into real working process. Precisely speaking, it's a waste of money and time for both the government and the adults. Like one of my older brother, he was sent to study abroad about new technology by the government aid when he was 31. Whereas the capabilities to accept new knowledge and to grasp a second language along with his growing age. This fact deprived his confidence and gradually the motivation of learning new skills was lost. Unfortunately, my 37-year old brother has no devotion to the development of the society till now. Apparently the con I addressed confirms the possibility of the ineffectiveness of the training.
In a nutshell, considering that whether it's effective to pay for training adults to learn up-to date skills depends on the quality of those people, and with the perspectives I mentioned above we can realize that that's not an absolute debate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, frankly, however, regarding, second, so, thus, well, whereas, while, as for, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06650831354 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78074133727 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508313539192 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5183309889 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2275709471 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740495879522 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565511367347 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147055745412 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352924117932 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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