The government wants to fund one of the following areas to improve children's education. Which one do you think is better? Why?
- provide some training courses so that teachers can be more professional
As an inseparable part of each glorious civilization (knowledge-based societies or knowledge-oriented societies), education is inextricably intertwined with people's lives. Since all aspects of life are susceptible to the influence of education, individuals must care about this crucial fact of their lives. While nowadays some people subscribe to the view that training new courses to teachers is the most significant pillar of children's success, others look at this concept through a different lens. Be that as it may, many remain neutral and adamantly claim that a myriad of elements must be taken into consideration to prove with belief is closer to reality. To my way of thinking, the more students have up to date teachers, the more profoundly they learn the subject matters. So I can say that this statement is the one I can be in agreement with. The following paragraphs will aptly substantiate my conspicuous viewpoints.
This argument is supported by the persuasively stated evidence not just opinion that tutoring new courses to the teachers is the best policy in order to increase the efficiency of the student's learning process. As a matter of fact, attending to the courses helps teachers to get acquainted with the wide assortment of new training methods which helps them to teach students in the new ways that the lessons never get faded in their minds. Besides, in the fluid world of high technology, teachers by participating in the courses offered by the government not only can update their information, but also can broaden the breadth of the student's knowledge. As a case in point, I vividly remember, when I was in high school, that education ministry provided some free courses for our teachers. At first, the dean and other school's staffs thought that it was a ridiculous approach. Nevertheless, after a month we considered that our science teacher changed her methodology in teaching and shifted her accentuation from theoretically into empirically approaches, such as laboratory exercises and scientific observations. Furthermore, she organized some scientific meetings which help us to extend our knowledge scope. Therefore, my personal experience competently corroborates the fact that attending to the classes is beneficial for either the teachers or students.
By the same token, one should regard another subtle point meticulously that in addition to enhance the efficiency of the educational trail, teachers can improve their self-confidence by updating their knowledge which self-satisfaction is its crowning achievement. To be more specific, the more teachers keep pace with the new technology, the more students honor them at school. The sentiment expressed in this statement embodies the view that knowledge is power, and being up to date with the latest science and technology fosters the students to become more focused in class and subsequently, they appreciate their worthwhile teacher. From a scientific perspective, recently I read results of the scientific research about children education, according to the study, the rate of respected teachers who have update knowledge of science and technology is significantly higher than those who do have not. Hence, these noteworthy statistics throw some light on the point that attending classes for teachers is highly crucial.
By and large, according to the above-mentioned reasons, I vehemently agree with this standpoint that attending to classes is really useful, and helps students to broaden their horizons. Now the inevitable question is that why some teachers resist attending this classes yet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 203, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...the efficiency of the students learning process. As a matter of fact, attending to the ...
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Line 2, column 633, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...but also can broaden the breadth of the students knowledge. As a case in point, I vividl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, while, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, by and large, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3031.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4125 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13522561682 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 301.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 921.6 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4110110279 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.772727273 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22476718091 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618788391145 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475477281621 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128007057766 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483610455392 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 86.8835125448 180% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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