Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic team

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Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic team.

All of the governments in the world have specific social plans and strategies to achieve their goals and targets. so from my point of view, I disagree with the statement that governments should spend more money to support of the art than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic team. I provide my opinion by two strong reasons which are state below:

The first reason which deserves to be declared here is that, sport is a way and an opportunity to governments to introduce their country in the world and usually people when watch their athletic teams in the world competitions, they can be proud of themselves and it doesn’t matter that their teams will be wine or lose. Also people can enjoy and have fun time when they are watching sport programs. For example in my country there is a football team which is supported by people in some cities. By this team, people can introduce themselves to the world. In addition they can have enjoyable time when they are watching their matches.

Another reason which I am intended to point out here is that, athletic teams can stimulate and encourage young people to do exercise and sport, and in that way governments can have healthier society with high efficiency in the long period. For example when I was a kid I was watching tv sport programs and I was encouraged all the time to do exercise, I had enthusiasm to spend all my time to do some specific sports and now after so many years I feel that efficiency in my life. I feel myself healthy without any disease or illness and thanks for such kind of tv sport programs.

To draw a conclusion, these are my reasons that governments should support athletic teams with more money. therefore it is very crucial point to societies, which that kind of plans should increase their life standards and life styles.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in addition, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70093457944 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57695487384 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479750778816 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.7587596942 48.9658058833 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.75 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290699018312 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128502512857 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.203313674008 0.0737576698707 276% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227927615685 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181042798827 0.0645574589148 280% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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