governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic games.
Nowadays, governments in each countries pay more and more attention on civil's daily life and part-time activity to improve the rate of people's happiness. Some of people believe governments should focus on the arts. However, others trust governments should spend more money for the athletics such as national Olympic teams. For my perspective, I disagree with that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Here are my reasons.
For one thing, some art works from artists cannot be understood by others. As we all know, the reason that some artists creating works is to show himself or herself feeling instead of sharing with others. So most of people cannot make sense with these works unless someone who has large amount of knowledge of art or somebody who is familiar with the artist. Oppositely, all of people could see national Olympic teams' effort. I believe that everyone would like to see their Olympic teams win the games in international competitions. Take me as an example, I like watching our Olympic team's performance in the Olympic games. I am proud of our teams when they got good ranks in the games. While I have no interest with some art works shows, I feel boring when I cannot understand what the artists thinking. That is why I think Olympic games are easier to understand than art works for most of people.
For another, state-sponsored Olympic teams to improve the training and daily lives of athletes could make them have better performance in games. We could see the athletes' improvement directly by their ranks to know whether the sponsored from the government is valuable or not. However, we could only give artists for financial help such as give them painting tools or help them to implement individual work shows. It does not mean that governments could help them to making better works. it is hard for people to say the sponsored to artists is waster money or not.
One coin has two sides, I have to admit that give artists financial help to implement could show their best works to people. During admiring these works, people would feel relaxed, also this is a kind of purity for their mental. However, the financial help could not help them to improve their works.
On balanced, government give sponsored to the athletics could help them to get better grades, and most of people could see the improvement of athletes directly. Some of us cannot make sense with some art works and the improvement of artists is invisible. That is why I disagree that governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, while, i feel, i think, kind of, such as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8954248366 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61073275131 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409586056645 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5106171637 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.88 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.36 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.12 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376586691058 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122430129453 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.20263271036 0.0737576698707 275% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257633163775 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.222184213133 0.0645574589148 344% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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