Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.
1/ grades are a double-edged sword, it can be an incentive or harm. we need to individualize education towards different types of students.
2/To some students, grades are just like missions in a game, they complete all the challenges and get the bounty. They'll regenerate quickly after stumbling over one fail. But to most of the students, especially in where of high population density. Grades are more like a whip but not an encouragement. Due to credentialism, millions of people compete for high grades to get into prestigious universities, and all they crave is mere a decent life guaranteed by academic degrees. In a highly stressful environment, people may become competitive or even snobbish. It's a common scene that parents in these areas, idolize the students with the highest grades and reckon them as a reference while reproaching their own kids. Some kids are even forbidden to have extracurricular interests like comics and games since they are considered useless to grades. Many people have no idea what to do after graduation, nor do dreams.
3/Real sustainable and efficient study is driven by interests and intrinsic motivation, not by competition. For instance, I love painting and I am devoted to it. When I start painting, all I can hear is the rustling of brush and lo-fi music from my headphone, all I can smell is the subtle scent of oil paint and turpentine oil. I am fully immersed in the imaginary world and leave all the competitions behind. My friend who loves math also has the same experience and they depict algebra and geometry as a beautiful poet which others may not understand. An American psychologist termed this mental state as Flow. It is characterized by high absorption in one thing that all other things and time become negligible. So does learning, people who in the flow zone are highly concentrated and fueled by their inner motivation and belief, not grades, just like me and my friend.
4/A voice rises that grades encourage students to learn and should be prioritized. However, Just like the ending of the movie: The Legend of 1900. The protagonist spends his whole life on a ship and feels overwhelmed and daunted by the world which is ever-changing, unpredictable, and has no absolute standard. Everyone will face the situation that there is no scoring system anymore after graduation, they need to notice that learning is a lifelong trek and personal stuff, and the only person we compare with is ourselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98062953995 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93968071474 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602905569007 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3796285376 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4347826087 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9565217391 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26086956522 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141668805617 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395256006851 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927314004086 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871506898642 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06873453273 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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