Do you agree or disagree with the following statement？
Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without sayng that in this modern and suffisticated world, going to school and learning a lot of materials is a great nessesity. Accordingly, people start going to school to learn different subjects from the time they are kids and schools use garading system to encourage students to study more and learn better. In this context, some people believe that these grades are not efficient and helpfull, however, some others subscribe to the idea that these gradings are encouraging students to learn better. I, fore one, concure with the latter argument. I hold this position for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To commence with, grading is making value for the progress of the students. To be more concrete, When a student gets 100 out of 100 grade in a course, they realize that had learned the course. On the other hand, when they get for instance 90 out of 100, it means there is need for more work on the subject. Consequently, this value can help students to try to learn more to get the highest mark in the class, which leads them to the highest value. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I was a medium student in middle school and had about average GPA in class. As a result, I had the feeling of not having the enough value as a student and decided to gain higher grades. I started studying hard and learning all the materials perfectly. As a subsequence, I got the highest grades of the class after and this continued to my high school graduation with the first rank GPA. This was a stimulation for me to study more and learn as much as I could to preserve my value and being in the first rank. Had I not been motivated by my low grades, I would have not been the first rank GPA in my high school.
Another key point to consider is that, grades creat a competition between students in a school. To put it in a more vivid picture, students start competing with each other for their grades and this competition is an additional motivation for learning. My own experience can drive this notion home. The time I was not studing much and had an average GPA, I was looking at my friends and feeling like I am falling behind by getting lower grades. This motivation to compete with them, was the encourage to start studying more, resulting in winning the competition.
In summary, considering all the foregoing arguments, I am firmly convinced that grades encourage students to learn. This is because not only do grades value the students' work and study, but also it creates competition between them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ourage students to study more and learn better. In this context, some people believe t...
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Line 1, column 506, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...dings are encouraging students to learn better. I, fore one, concure with the latter a...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...is motivation to compete with them, was the encourage to start studying more, resulting in wi...
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Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'starting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: starting
...to compete with them, was the encourage to start studying more, resulting in winning the...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, so, for instance, in summary, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61622807018 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5530827584 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486842105263 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0369414495 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5217391304 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8260869565 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185039222619 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599872789655 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042374824889 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135060551612 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383528320102 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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