Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
When it comes to how to motivate students to learn, some people may assert that grading students’ exams and homework can let students want to pursue more knowledge with the aim of garner higher marks. Nonetheless, in my perspective, grades may not encourage students to learn. Instead students may feel stressful and forget the purpose of learning.
To begin with, grades will let some students forgo learning because in the grade competition students will feel stressful. When their grade are transcend by their classmates maybe they will lose the motivation to improve. For example, in my third grade, my teachers and parents asked me to do plenty of math exercises with a view to get a high score in my final exam. However, this command also gave me the pressure because I was fear of failing in the exams. Finally, in that exam, I could not apply what I learn from the courses, as I was too nervous. However, my friend who was asked to just pass that subject got the high grade, since he do not have the pressures, which in turn may allow him to fulfill his potential in the exam.
In addition, students who place too many emphasis on the grade will lost the orientation about learning, since they will focus on the techniques about how to take the exams. On the flip side, provided that students place more stress on how to procure more knowledge from their teachers, they may secure more momentum to learn. For instance, in my seventh grade, my cram school’s teachers educated me a bunch of understanding about how to choose the correct answers even if I did not understand the mechanism of it. This made me always be the top three in the class. However, I did not fully comprehend the knowledge, which made me feel painful when I study the high school’s material, which make me want to give up learning. Besides, I also do not know why I need to learn and what is the meaning of the gorgeous grades. On the contrary, when I studied in the college, I understood why I need this knowledge and I do not pursue the high scores because I know that more significant thing is what treasures I obtain from the courses.
To sum up, pursuing high grades will let students feel stressful when they need to compare with others. Besides, they may also forget why they need to learn that knowledge. It is evident that putting too many emphasis on marks will not allow students want to learn more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...mpetition students will feel stressful. When their grade are transcend by their clas...
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...ll feel stressful. When their grade are transcend by their classmates maybe they will los...
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Suggestion: does
...at subject got the high grade, since he do not have the pressures, which in turn m...
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...m to fulfill his potential in the exam. In addition, students who place too many...
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...stand the mechanism of it. This made me always be the top three in the class. However, I ...
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...at treasures I obtain from the courses. To sum up, pursuing high grades will let...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, third, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6191588785 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47862180091 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469626168224 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2913021309 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.052631579 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5263157895 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.10526315789 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176159277321 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650492552905 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559035257464 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130982011451 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378129573496 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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