Agree or disagree: visiting museums is the best way to study about a country.
Every country have their own features, which may compose of the people there and the landscape and so on. there have plenty of instrumentalities to know about the country. Many people assert that through viewing the museums’ asset people can better understand that country. Nonetheless, in my perspective, it is not true base on the following two reasons.
First of all, most of the museum’s asset is derive from long time ago, which means that it can not represent the culture of the country now. this may mislead the people’s acknowledge about the local folk now. For example, China’s museum may contain plenty of potteries or vanes, which is produced by ancient governments or secure from other countries though launching the war before. through those object people may misunderstand the Chinese eating habit. In fact, now little of the citizens will employ those tools, instead most of the people may exercise the spoon or chopsticks to eat. if the foreign only viewing the museums’ asset, they will know merely about the history of that country and ignore the most significant part, which is the present culture.
In addition, local people is one of the most vital factor of a country. interacting with the people there is a much better way than just visiting the museum, because we can learn their society from their habit. For instance, if people have a friend coming from China, they will know that they take the shower at night instead of on morning, because the weather there is scorching hot, which in turn will let them sweat a lot during daytime, which means that most of them will stop interacting with their friends or doing the work at night. Provided that people know about that information, they will not only grasp the people’s habit but also deeply understand about the reason behind it, which in turn recognize how their society operate.
To sum up, just visiting the museum may only let people understand the history of that country but the most pivotal part : the present culture. Moreover, having the local friends are a better way to understand a country because this will make them know the reason of their habit, which in turn comprehend their society. it is evident that viewing the asset in the museum will not let people study about a country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90231362468 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43514293308 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467866323907 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3810025925 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.176470588 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165025554299 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06638515497 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553834866015 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123740200425 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581213638594 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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