It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
1/public transportation is the cornerstone of all the subsequent construction. There's a famous Chinese saying:" If you want to be wealthy, built roads first" Basic infrastructure is a rewarding necessity for connecting the most fringe and deprived villages with prosperous and developed cities.
2/People gain opportunities to touch the outside world, not in a virtual way but in the real world. Household goods to medical supplies are transformed easily, which may assure necessities and prop up the livelihoods of the farmers.
3/Government subsequent construction can be more efficiently implemented. Compare with unpaved roads, highways are more easily to convey building materials such as rocks, glass, metals, concrete, and so forth, people have no need to suffer from bumpy roads and threaten by unknown dangers. Not to mention high-speed infrastructure. For example, a couple of years ago when I was young in elementary school, visiting relatives during the Lunar New Year was an arduous trek as long distance and inconvenient transportation system. We had to take at least half a day confining ourselves on hard seats inside a narrow coach, meanwhile suffering from stale air and bumpy roads. After the long torture, we arrived provincial capital and still needed to transfer on a bus to a small city and then take a cab home. My mother always got motion sickness and felt nauseous, the first thing while getting into my grandparents' home was to take a rest. With the improvement of public transportation these years, now we can come back hometown within six hours by safe and clean high-speed rail, no need to get anxious about it anymore. In that case, not for me but all people can benefit from it, sophisticated teachers and doctors have chances to contribute to those areas with less psychological struggles, thus a virtuous cycle forms.
4/A voice rises that efficient transportation can cause the exodus of the workforce and lead to left-behind children and empty nesters problems. However, these two aspects are not incompatible, we should pay equal attention to them, like providing psychotherapy and social services. Without public transportation, all of these are just pie in the sky.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...unities to touch the outside world, not in a virtual way but in the real world. Household goods ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, while, as to, at least, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26553672316 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10736517713 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.69209039548 0.524837075471 132% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8930871611 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117859114223 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0345266443648 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418433872634 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0536920785697 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371492034829 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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