is hard work or luck the main reason for success? what do you think?
Success is the endeavor of all humans. So, it remains controversial what is the reason behind it. People are divided in two teams, one believes that hard work is the solely way to be successful; the other thinks it comes down to good luck. Personally, I am sided with the group that views hard work is essential to achieve any success. I have a couple of justifications upon which I build my persuasion on this and I will be elaborating on hereafter.
Basically, any accomplishment has pillars which it is built on. Those pillars are the prerequisites that must be provided to reach out any set out goal. A prime example on this is me having aced up my IELTS over all score band. In order to do so, I have exerted painstaking effort to enhance all my English language skills. I have had countless voice calls via my Facebook messenger and Skype with my native English speaking pals from USA and the like on a daily basis, in addition I have watched the CNN almost all the time I am home. As such my spoken English has exponentially improved. Moreover, I have read English magazines and news papers online like The Economist and The Wall Street Jurnal, as well as I have emulated the writing style of their professional essayists. Thence, both my reading and writing skills have been enhanced. This true to life example shows that the without taking action, aspirations will not be obtained.
What is more, slacking off for the sake of just awaiting for good fortune is counterproductive. Steps that must be crossed to found the basis on which achievement is brought about will not be taken. Hence, Ambitions will not see the light. This is historically materialized in the dark ages Europe had gotten through as a result of not working for civilization and sophistication. The medieval church which theocratically ruled Europe then had banned education in science and literature; just mislead people claiming that they should be just reliant on God's blessings and luck. Therefore, the then Europeans had been uneducated and not being able to stablish any advancement let alone civilization. Thus, depending merely on wishful thinking restrains people from reaching out what they endeavors.
In conclusion, setting back doing nothing but daydreaming does not get one anywhere but failure to get what they long to. So, being positive and fulfilling what is required is of essence to convert dreams to reality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89024390244 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85999400955 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587804878049 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8303355839 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1739130435 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8260869565 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173515643015 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460763078779 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568774827404 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118363484585 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864518849115 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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