HAS THE MEDIA PAID TOO MUCH ATTENTION TO CELEBRITIES?
Media, for the longest time, has covered stories about celebrities as means to attract viewership. If we had to answer the question, “Has the media paid too much attention to celebrities?”My answer would be a yes. I am inclined to believe that the media has given too much attention to celebrities through negative as well as positive ways. Let us discuss the same in the following paragraph.
Celebrities as public figures have been subjected to the judgement of the public and the media on their personal life and their career trajectory. Media tend to pay too much attention to a celebrity’s life, especially personal matters and this tends to make a false narrative in two ways. The celebrity will either be glamorised or villianised to an extent where they are scrutinised at every part of their life. I would like to bring up the British royal family as an example, where the family’s lives have been glamorised or villainized to an extent, which in turn makes them susceptible to media and public’s scrutiny.
Furthermore, Paparazzi is another form of media that takes unsolicited pictures of celebrities for tabloid articles. Thus, totally disregarding the celebrity’s privacy and not taking into consideration that they are normal people with normal lives. This type of media coverage, though being considered a crime, still exists today.Therefore, the celebrities are at a vulnerable place and affecting their mental health. One of the recent examples for the issue at hand is Britney Spears. The American singer had to go through mental therapy and rehabilitation after being gone through intense media scrutiny and faced negativity all through her career.
Thus, in conclusion, I would like to reiterate that the media does pay too much attention to celebrities and their personal lives. The celebrities are put through intense media scrutiny with disregard to their privacy. Thus, affecting their mental health along the way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26751592357 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96420009619 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557324840764 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0394160283 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.375 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445267922292 0.236089414692 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149710289655 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149278192659 0.0737576698707 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298573599926 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146125774304 0.0645574589148 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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