A high school that normally gives students about two months of time off from school during the summer is introducing a new educational requirement for students in eleventh grade ages 16 17 Over the summer students have the following two options to fulfill

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A high school that normally gives students about two months of time off from school during the summer is introducing a new educational requirement for students in eleventh grade (ages 16-17). Over the summer, students have the following two options to fulfill the new requirement:

-- They can attend classes each day for several weeks to complete a university-level course on a subject that they are considering selecting as their major field of study at university.

Or

-- They can spend several weeks traveling to museums and historic places in their area with a group of students guided by a teacher, and then write a paper about their experience.

Which ONE of these options do you think would be most beneficial for students, and why?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.

Summer's holiday is a golden time for teenager students who want to gratuated next year from school, to choose their ways of life in continue. The question here is which should prefer by students: The classes with the essential materials for their resume study or the trip with their peers to museums to have some beneficial, practical expriences? There may seem to be contraversy at first glance; However, I significantly concur with latter idea. They can learn about their future work properly. Besides, with knowing their future feild, they can work diligently to reach their dreamful future. I illusrate more my opinions in the following paragraph.

First, The students could solve their vagueness about their future. The eleventh grade student commonly involve with theoritical subjects like mathematics, chemestry, or physics. They usually haven't any idea about realistic world. For example, when I was 17, I mastered in mathematics. I spent all my times in studing diffrint roles and functions in math. If you asked me a math question, it was very little posibility that I couldn't solve it. But, after I did my entrance exam, when it times to select my future feild, I have little informants. So, I choosed civil engeeniring without know that courses I must to pass. Afterward, I got bad grades in civil courses for two years and then I changed my feild to mathematic.

Second, They have more delightened sense when they know their future works. When human haven't any idea about his future, he could left their enthusiasm to continue.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'leave'
Suggestion: leave
...ent any idea about his future, he could left their enthusiasm to continue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, thus, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1291.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 256.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04296875 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63166181735 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6484375 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2702651501 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9411764706 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0588235294 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152287717643 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477376107078 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544833257209 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093205581893 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049037906853 0.0645574589148 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.36 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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