A high school that normally gives students about two months of time off from school during the summer is introducing a new educational requirement for students in eleventh grade (ages 16-17). Over the summer, students have the following two options to fulfill the new requirement:
-- They can attend classes each day for several weeks to complete a university-level course on a subject that they are considering selecting as their major field of study at university.
Or
-- They can spend several weeks traveling to museums and historic places in their area with a group of students guided by a teacher, and then write a paper about their experience.
Which ONE of these options do you think would be most beneficial for students, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
In recent years, students have to spend more time learning the lessons correctly and achieving the learning objectives. Useful and effective use of times when students do not go to school is one of the effective solutions for students. In other words, for students to succeed in their studies, they must attend more classes to be useful to them. Attending classes each of the days for several weeks to complete a university-level course on a subject that they are considering selecting as their major field of study at university is more beneficial for students. Personally, I agree with this statement due to various reasons, two of which I'm going to elaborate upon to substantiate my viewpoint in the following essay.
First of all, in recent years amount of the Volume of course topics, are significant increases. Students have to spend more time learning the lessons correctly and achieving the learning objectives. If students do not spend a lot of time learning, they will have difficulty learning and achieving educational goals. For instance, my high school decided to hold classes in the summer. I'm attending this class and when I'm going to the university, I was more successful in my studies than my other classmates because I had learned the lessons of high school well and succeeded in my university studies. Spending time on classes that prepare the student for college can lead to greater success in the course.
Secondly, I think over the summer if students don't have a program they waste the time in the working student don't need them like playing the game and spending time with their friends. Planning to have training classes instead of spending time on worthless tasks can bring more benefits to students. In fact, when students want to study at the university, they face a lot of courses, and if they can not prepare for the university during the summer holidays, they will suffer a lot. However, attending classes is more rewarding for students than anything else.
In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned points, I firmly believe that attending classes during the summer can be beneficial for the students. This is because not only students can improve their level of dominance in lessons, but also students can Be more successful at university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, of course, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04221635884 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.767106918 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459102902375 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3535397836 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.411764706 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257929039176 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997264605362 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519260627855 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177208915674 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024882915686 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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