Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Psychology has proved that the mainstay of individuals' characters is built during their younghood. A question that might arise here is that are teachers more influential on students or it is their friends that play the main role. Personally, though, I am of the strong conviction that the latter is correct. To support this, there are several reasons, two of dominant which, are discussed in detail in the following.
First and foremost, students spend most of their time with their friends rather than their teachers. If they go to the same school, they get to see each other in the classrooms for at least eight hours a day. In addition, it is very likely for them to spend more time after school hours hanging out and playing to an appreciable extent. Therefore, they might simply affect each other. The way they talk and behave in society would be influenced significantly and their thinking pattern tends to become similar as naturally, when people spend time together, they make discussions and exchange ideas sometimes on a subconscious level and young students are no exception. However, this is not the case for teachers. They are often unable to put adequate time and effort necessary to shape students’ characters.
Furthermore, students have more trust in their peers in comparison to their teachers. This stems from the fact that once individuals acknowledge that they share similar perspectives regarding certain problems, they build a tendency towards having more trust in that person. Once they realize the person they are talking to is capable of putting himself in their shoes, they start to believe that this very person is competent enough to share their world with. As a consequence, a good rapport would be established, and automatically, when you have a nice relationship with someone, you drop your guards. This increases the chances of being influenced by that person more easily. Since students are more trustworthy towards each other, they are susceptible to be influenced by their friends on a great level.
To wrap it up, contemplating what was discussed above, students are more influenced by their friends than their teachers. This is because they spend most of their time with their friends and thus, they exchange ideas during those times and affect each other. Moreover, as students trust their friends more than their teachers, they share their worldviews, interest, and concerns and this cause students to be under the influence of their friends.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, at least, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13267813268 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69044573824 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515970515971 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2216746329 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.45 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.35 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305417231318 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111069934919 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105692843018 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216770674368 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761862079833 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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