Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Privacy-life should be garaunteed for a person to have peace in her or his life. The issue that initiating by nowadays modernitie and emerging social media is celebrities or famous athletes who have gotten their fame from these media and conditions, how much privacy should be have? Personally in the believe that they should have more privacy than now and only their news about their work allowed to be distributed. I try to asserts my opinion in the following essay.
First off, they should have human-rights like every people. I know the privacy-life as a human-right because I believe without privacy-life a person would be so anxiety and nervous. This concept is vissible in some celebrities who after a while of their fame, they can't control and provide a balanced between their work and their privacy-life, hence they would be nervous after that and indicate some odd manner which cause to fall their fame too. Generally, in same situation, people should allow them to be alone for somewhile, respect their privacy, and don't be persistant to aware about their situation. This condition helps them to recover theirself and be more successfull in their work.
Secondly, I should mention that many of celebrities have child and children are not guilty to don't have privacy and peace because their parents lifestyle. Also the parents should be in the situation far away any stress to train their child properly. Here I should remember that the children are not guilty to have inapropriate nurture due to their parents' anxiety. It is obviouse that some celebrities or some fans involve their child with their fame. This problem which create a life without privacy-life, can adverse effects on the children's future.
In summary, Both of the people and celebrities should seek to apart their private life from their work in order to celebrities like any normally people experience peacefullness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'had'?
Suggestion: had
... conditions, how much privacy should be have? Personally in the believe that they sh...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...h privacy should be have? Personally in the believe that they should have more privacy than...
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Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...ivacy should be have? Personally in the believe that they should have more privacy than...
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Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'assert'.
Suggestion: assert
...ork allowed to be distributed. I try to asserts my opinion in the following essay. F...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s who after a while of their fame, they cant control and provide a balanced between ...
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Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'falling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: falling
...nd indicate some odd manner which cause to fall their fame too. Generally, in same situ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...r somewhile, respect their privacy, and dont be persistant to aware about their situ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ve child and children are not guilty to dont have privacy and peace because their pa...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... peace because their parents lifestyle. Also the parents should be in the situation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, while, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08626198083 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71563991727 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5303514377 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9120738303 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.133333333 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133099765012 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605533053258 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537629601638 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.09150059536 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768250810225 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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