Holidays honor people or events If you could create a new holiday what person or event would it honor and how would you want people to celebrate it Use specific reasons and details to support your answer

There are various kinds of national holidays in my country; among them are the day of mountains, the day of sea, and the like. People can benefit from national holidays because they do not have to work on those occasions. I would like to introduce a new national holiday which celebrates sports. I would delve further into my idea in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, sport events play a pivotal role in our society. In my native country, a kind of wrestling is designated as a national sport and thus wrestling is very famous throughout the nation. We go to see the matches or see them on the television on a daily basis. Wrestling is tightly attached to our daily lives. However, there is not a holiday which aims to celebrate sports. Considering its significance, I believe that sports day should be created.

Another reason to support my idea is that it serves as a catalyst for connecting different countries. The Olympic games is one of the most flamboyant events in the world. As far as I know, one of its goals is to bring peace to the whole world through connecting nations by holding sports events. Likewise, any sports events hold a crucial importance, in which athletes from a diverse array of countries compete in the same match. There are no distinctions between black and white. In this sense, sports competitions have been helpful for people around the world to understand the diversity among the human species. This is why I think nominating sports day as a holiday is of critical importance.

Finally, playing sports benefit every individual. We cannot underestimate its value. People can lose weight, build muscles, and lead a healthier life by stretching our extremities and sweating. Take my father's case. He did not take any exercise after he started working. He gained weight year by year. However, after he made it a point to take a jog after dinner following his doctor's advice, his shape got slimmer and slimmer. It directly benefited his health condition as well. Admittedly, jogging is not as hard as some other sports. Therefore, it goes without saying that playing sports with others will benefit more than just jogging. Drawing from this example, sports help us lead a better life.

As mentioned above, sports definitely have a good effect on people, our society, and our world. Therefore, it is not an overstatement to claim that the country should decide to hold a national day of celebrating sports. It will create a better society on the whole, bringing peace to our minds.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, so, therefore, thus, well, i think, kind of, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88111888112 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6918404422 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552447552448 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7082458171 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.5483870968 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8387096774 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38709677419 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116244971212 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0300067091445 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438529873253 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069095930608 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554675640556 0.0645574589148 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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