In today's world movies and television play a considerable role in our life. Many channels and programs are produced for specific reasons and lots of money is spent on them. I believe movies change people's beliefs and behaviors through their so-called reality, and televisions are included a lot of fake or true news that can modify people's notions on different matters. In the following essay, I will explore my reasons.
First of all, movies create a desired world for audience, which I believe in most cases are something far away from a real life. As a result, people perceive these differences between their life and the one introduced in a movie, so they try to change themselves into what they see. For example, recently, I have seen a movie, which was about a person who worked in a large company with a good income; however, he was not satisfied with his job and once realized that he must go for his dreams, which might provide less money but would be more interesting. After watching that film, I realized, why not me? Why shouldn't I try for what I like? So that, I attended a painting class, which was my favorite thing since I can remember.
Secondly, televisions have a significant impact on our life by their remarkable investing on creating news in the way that is easier to follow. In fact, clearly you can see their large effort to make influencing film for example about the Syria's conflict, containing the scene from a real battle or a homeless child who has been lost his parents. On the one way, it would raise the awareness of people about important things happen somewhere around them in the world; on the other hand, it might has another reason, such as raising people hate for a special country or government, in order to reach a consensus for subsequent reactions.
In conclusion, I believe movies and televisions affect our beliefs and notions in different ways, such as creating a desired life in order to follow them, and producing effective news in order to provoke public emotions to their own goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... that film, I realized, why not me? Why shouldnt I try for what I like? So that, I atten...
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...oke public emotions to their own goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75492957746 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58939592103 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580281690141 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.5707092788 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.571428571 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123017587225 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410289972961 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436365161306 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848915492914 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547411506255 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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