How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
The fame of the industry of television and movies has increased through the years due to these type of sector invest millions of dollars in good quality of production, high wages for actors and merchandising strategies for the fans. I firmly believe that currently, the entertainment industry is a great source of influence on people's behavior. In this sense, I will explain the reasons for my position in the following essay.
First and foremost, the industry of movies (horror, suspense, romantic, etc.) and television which includes realities shows, soap operas, and so on, gives people the opportunity to be part of a story and share the same feelings of the actors and actresses. What is more, a lot of people (no matter the age) are constantly trying to change their attitudes and looking like the same as possible to the actor of their television program due to these actors are "perfect humans." For instance, some children around the world have an especially preference in be a superhero like Superman, Batman and so on, and they try to act similar to this heroes in their day by day.
Another important reason is that the lifestyle that is portrayed in movies and television is very desirable for ordinary people who dream with kind of popularity, famous and fortune of actors and actresses. In this sense, be famous is the driving force behind their effort to change own behavior. For example, when Harry Potter had its peak of famous, millions of children dreamed of being a little wizard.
In sum, definitely this kind of industry impacts on the lives of millions of people around the world, especially on children. For that reasons, I would recommend being careful with the programs or movies that people see because we need to educate good citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, so, for example, for instance, kind of, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95317725753 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70620439772 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558528428094 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.6371932546 48.9658058833 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.636363636 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1818181818 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156841799386 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626350118963 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0386174298723 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0969514869013 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175103955589 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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