If the government wants to invest in the following three areas what do you think is the most worthwhile o land exploration o education o health care | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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If the government wants to invest in the following three areas, what do you think is the most worthwhile?
o land exploration
o education
o health care

Our modern era is going to be more sophisticated every day. The complexity in different majors such as land exploration, health care science, education, etc. is progressively going to be increased. This complexity has emerged from our ancestors' knowledge, and discovering the new things in a major is impossible without accessing previous information in that area. Although the necessity of Health care or land exploration is undeniable, I would rather think that it is worthwhile that the government invests in education. In the following paragraphs, the most outstanding reasons for my opinion will be explained.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that there is no cast of doubt in the importance of learning in every stage of our life from born to death. Different majors had been shaped based on the knowledge that passed away from our grandparents to us. Indeed, health care and land explorations are the fields that need expertise for expansion, and those must be well educated. From my point of view, it will be more profitable if governments invest in education. Because the well-developed expertise needs the proper bed of knowledge for improving themselves, and students play an important role in every countries future. They are their assets that can explore the dark side of science, and it is our duties that provide them for a better future. For the elucidation of my view, let me give an example. In World War II, Germany's governments decided to invest their budget on education of expertise, who helped to resist the pressure of the enemy. Although they lost the war, this investment flourished after the war, and now, Germany has become a developed country in every aspect of science.
Another equally important reason is that academic expertise can help governments harvest their investment as soon as possible. By working educated individuals in industries, the wheel of industry is going to move faster. In fact, this fast movement means that the more accommodates and the more trades, which at last brings too much profit for the country. For instance, in the previous example of Germany, Educated expertise returned Germany’s industries into the first rank of profitable and lucrative industries in the world, which is reported as a piece of strong evidence that had been published in the economic magazine of the United States. There is a big question here.” How could it be possible that a country which was horribly damaged in the war became the first rank of the world’s economy?” The only answer that could be explained this progressive development is education. Germany would not be successful if they did not decide to invest in education.
In sum, we can conclude that investment in education not only helps for the improvement of other majors, but also help to bring back the investment costs as soon as possible. Isn’t it better for being a developed country to take away the path of the nationalities that passed this path successfully?

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, while, for instance, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2498.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05668016194 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88693492934 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518218623482 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4717839443 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.608695652 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4782608696 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174842136448 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537717297998 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077114458229 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113983770843 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073219959638 0.0645574589148 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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