Some people prefer to go and visit tourist attraction where there are many people. Others like the one with fewer people. Which one do you prefer?
Infestation of difficulties in human life sometimes makes him overwhelmed. Visiting tourist attractions is always the best solution for passing the condition. It helps them to release their stress, and motivate themselves. But it has been always questioned which kind of places is the best choice for this purpose, clam places with a pristine nature without individuals or crowded one which attract more visitor across the world? From my point of view the sound of crowded places is much more interesting than the other. In the following paragraphs the most outstanding reason for my point of view will be explained.
The first remarkable point to substantiate my standpoint is crowded tourist attractions provides people with the great opportunities to find new friends and socialize with them. It also leads individuals to increase their informations about that place. Each individuals interact with others and this concept enumerate the great relationships. To bring into the more vivid picture, I should express my personal experience in this field. Five years ago, my husband and I decided to go somewhere for spending our honeymoon. He offered me an amazing trip to Italy. Although the sound of Visiting a European country was fabulous, I would rather prefer to spend our honeymoon where it has beautiful sceneries with virgin nature for being more memorable. On the other hand, when I saw my husband enthusiastic for Italy trip, I respected to his eager. So, we went there. In the first day of our trip, we met a dozen of couples that they were new too. They were nice and charming people. So, my husband and I decided to hang out them more and more. After that trip, our friendship have got stronger, and now, we are close friends. If we had not chosen this trip, we lost our opportunities in finding fantastic friends and having marvelous honeymoon.
Another reason which is worthy to mentioning here is that the places which attract more tourists have better welfare amenities. Countries which have been more traveled have great services for travelers like, comfortable hotels, great transportation systems and amazing restaurants. In fact, the government of those countries invest on all this subordinates due to attract more visitors. Indeed, in order to inject the more revenue into the tourists’ industry, the better welfare amenities require. For example, in our honeymoon all the hotels and restaurants located there, were marvelous. There were all type of foods from all around world to satisfy international visitors, and comfortable hotels with luxury design were built by government to attain tourists. Also, the public transportation system was awesome. Taxies brought people everywhere, however, tourists could travelled all around the cities by bus or subway system in cheapest cost. All of these facilities would not available if there were not enough passengers.
Taking all the aforementioned into account, one can conclude that crowded tourists attractions not only provide grate opportunities for finding new international friends, but also help you to enjoy your trips by use of outstanding facilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
...stress, and motivate themselves. But it has been always questioned which kind of places is the ...
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Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...se their informations about that place. Each individuals interact with others and th...
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Line 3, column 873, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'travel'
Suggestion: travel
...ple everywhere, however, tourists could travelled all around the cities by bus or subway ...
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Line 3, column 929, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the cheapest'.
Suggestion: in the cheapest
...ound the cities by bus or subway system in cheapest cost. All of these facilities would not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, thus, for example, in fact, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26546906188 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86900024846 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554890219561 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.0251463061 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96666666667 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165966160931 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0343408104721 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461284655803 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963180793242 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00430783016354 0.0645574589148 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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