If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

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If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

Job plays a great impact on person lives. In this world, everybody is doing a different kind of jobs, some people get the easy job while others get the hard job. Some people think that the satisfaction in a job is very important. Perhaps, according to them, satisfy job will make you happy and these people don't give priority to the money and the major thing for them is satisfaction in the job. However, other believe that if people have the opportunity of a secure job, they should take it without wasting their time. I firmly believe that people should waste their time in thinking and should select the secure job whenever they have that opportunity because they will save more money and can enjoy their job.
First, people can save more money. However, people search for their required job which satisfied them, will take a longer time to find that. Ultimately they wasted their precious time and money. If, they work on any job, which is at least a secure job, they will make more money and save it for the future. For instance, my uncle john worked in Toshiba company last year. He lost his job because of the country crisis in the last November. After, that he applied for many jobs and he was looking for a relevant job which is related to his field and a satisfy job. He got opportunities from different companies and interview calls, but he didn't answer that because he didn't satisfy with that jobs. Ultimately, he didn't find any job yet. He gave the priority to his satisfaction rather than need. It proves me that people should neglect their satisfaction in the job and accept the opportunity whatever they have.
Second, if the people have a secure job, they will spend their life stress-free and will enjoy each moment of life. An example of my close friend can demostrated this reason. when she passed her High school, she desperately need a job to support her further education and other expenses. She applied on some many websites, dropped her resume personally on the hiring locations, and call so many other places. Eventually, she got the interview call and she preferred that whatever the job she will get first, she will go through it. Now, she saved a lot of money and live a happy and satisfied life.
In conclusion, I certainly believe that if people have the opportunity, they should take it right away. Not only they save their time and save more money, but will enjoy their life. By doing all these, we can save our country from the unemployment crisis.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, so, while, at least, for instance, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34511977879 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459090909091 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8696806136 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6923076923 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9230769231 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401828502533 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123445729584 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102927102651 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250597876092 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121102623413 0.0645574589148 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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