If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
Nowadays, we are living in a very competitive world with so many students graduating from universities and hunting jobs. In this way, so many people believe that one who found a secure job, must take it and not wait for better opportunities. Others, however, think that by taking a secure job, they lose the chance of finding more satisfying career. From my vantage point, in this competitive era, having a secure job is better for a specific number of reasons.
First of all, we all need money to survive. To continuing our lives, it is essential to eat food, wear clothes and have a place to stay in. Therefore, money is a necessity of humans’ lives. If people wait to find a satisfying job and do not do anything, they will definitely run into financial problems. In addition, when young people avoid taking jobs, just because it is not their favorite one, they cannot start to be an independent person as a mature human and this may result in so many mental problems. For instance, before going to work, I was not confident enough and I felt high levels of stress and pressure.
Secondly, for being a successful person in our career, we need to be experienced. By taking a secure job, we can learn so many things and it helps us to improve our skills, knowledge and abilities. Therefore, after some years, we can get promotions, earn more incomes and become an effective person in the society. As a vivid example, my father started working in a car company, which he did not like. However, he tried so hard and after years, not only he started liking his job, but also he became one of the best managers in our country.
Last but not least, for finding a more satisfying job, it is vital to have a good resume. Nowadays, many companies would favor someone with more working experiences. Hence, if there is a record of working experience in the resume, the chance of getting better and more satisfying job increases. For example, when my sister finished her studies, she looked for a job and when I asked her about the conditions, she told me that almost all of the companies want a person with at least five years of working experience. Therefore, if people avoid taking a secure job, they will actually lose the chance of finding their desired job and waiting for it will just make troubles for them.
To sum it up, I am of the opinion that when there is the opportunity to get a secure job, we should take it to avoid financial problems, improve our working skills and even to increase the chance of getting a better job by improving our resume. In my opinion, as finding a job is a dilemma, I suggest everyone to use all the opportunities they have, even if they are not good.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 434, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...the conditions, she told me that almost all of the companies want a person with at least f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57319587629 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58967758878 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484536082474 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5643689744 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.818181818 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.68181818182 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405735515079 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117917295596 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092801360648 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236679634811 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078352966307 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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