If a school was given more money should it be invested inorganising social activities for students after class hours or improve food at cafeteria ? Support with relevant reasons and examples.
The most important asset of a school lies in its students, and it is their responsibility to provide the best facilities to them. Personally, I believe that arranging social events for students after their class gets over will be a better use of money invested by the school.
I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, when children engage in social activities, their connections widens and their friend circle expands. When we volunteer for any interactive workshop, we tend to meet new people, and can some times even make some permanent mates. Consequently, our communication skills expands , we even a have a better knowledge of human nature and we even make some life-time memories. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I joined my University, I was always enthusiastic about taking parts in various events and fests and thus, I volunteered for one society called Rotaract club. I started working for it enthusiastically, and after seeing my work I was chosen as one of the heads in that community. I became very good at leading new groups, interacting with people and even started holding some workshops individually. I had totally become opposite of what I was in school, I was shy and would rarely volunteer for any event. The advantage is not only limited here but it extends to our future opportunities as well.
Secondly, if we get involve in many interactive sessions, we have high chance of getting better job opportunities or to get admission in some excellent universities. Nowadays, companies prefer giving job to those fresher who have a well connected network and who have been an all-rounder along with their academics. In fact, some of the very big universities give weightage to those tasks that we have done for benefit of others. Being a member of communities, which are dedicated to social cause, can give weight to our resume. For instance, one of my friends was very desperate to get admission in an ivy League University. He was a member of AISEC, a society which aims at helping needy students all over the world, and this raised his chance of getting selected and he made it to Columbia University.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that investing money for students, so that they can take part in social activities will actually benefit the school. This is because it will help them to develop certain new skills and because, it will help them have a better career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85377358491 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85639112207 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556603773585 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5932999201 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.9 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176331915218 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552989379591 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623548041565 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102819702341 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570276529596 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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