If there is a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you would take?
1- Take more exercise
2- Eat healthy food
3- Reduce the amount of stress
Having a favorable life and seeming as a prosperous person are among the most significant dreams of each human being. Many approaches exist for individuals to enhance themselves and bring more suitable lives for themselves, such as doing some exercises during each week, consuming healthier foods and declining their level of anxiety. I, to a great extent, hold the view point that to achieve a much better life, all humankind must do some exercises as a constant plan during all their lives. My reasons are manifold, among which the most conspicuous ones are substantiated in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, one of the most exquisite point of this claim is related to this importance that all physicians believe that in order to have better life, all individuals must participate in some sports continuously. As a matter of fact, doing exercises not only does bring healthier bodies for individuals but also assist them to have more energetic lives. To shed more light on this matter, by doing some sports during each week, persons can regulate the metabolisms of their bodies; therefore, they can prevent the happening of some harmful illnesses, such as diabetes and heart attack. Those kinds of diseases are very hazardous since they can create many other kinds of illnesses, and as a result, they will bring heavy remedial expenses for the families. To give a tangible example, consider a family whose members do not accomplish any exercises during the week, beyond a shadow of a doubt, after some years, they will become very obese persons who have sundry kinds of illnesses. Thus, they must spend a huge amount of money in their remedial processes. Furthermore, they cannot enjoy their lives effectively since most of the time, they are sick. Consequently, the less amounts of exercises humans do, the more they will become ill and the more they must expend for their treatments.
The second and equally significant cause of this assertion is about this importance that robust bodies will bring more effective brain for humankind. In other word, when individuals have healthy bodies, they can think and performe more impressively. Indeed, they can analyze assorted kinds of issues more effectively; thus, they can decide much better, and they will become more successful in their sundry parts of their lives. It is worth mentioning that one of our most important religious leaders in Islam says “Healthy brains exist in robust bodies”. This message teaches us that so as to have much better and more delightful lives, we must have healthy bodies which are the consequences of doing some exercises during our lives and in continual plan.
All in all, considering the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that the most impressive method to have much better life is to do some exercises constantly. This idea is as a result of these two matters that by participating in some sports humans not only do have healthier bodies but also can decide more effectively and become more prosperous in their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2554.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08764940239 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71347793296 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46812749004 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.9040394813 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.421052632 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4210526316 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0740505995287 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327459707548 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290474353942 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0548650015185 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221005351818 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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