If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

A hometown should have necessary standards, which causes people have appetite to live in it. If I have a power which could change my hometown, without doubt I change the transportation system. However, my hometown has various problems such as policy, culture, lack of entertainment and etc. but, I prefer to change the public transportation. In the fowling essay I want to describe my reasons.

To begin with, transportation system is the most reason for pollution. My hometown has a week public transportation system, so people of my hometown use a personal machine which has caused the range of toxic gases has increased in these years. If I can modify the system transportation, I do a work that causes people use this system rather their cars. For example I will design the system makes transportation system is available every time for people. In order to, first I will increase the bus in every area qua people can by them commute in whole hometown. Then I will expand metro lines which make a comfortable, safe and fast system. When these facilities are accessible for everyone gradually the rate of users increase, and whereby the level of pollution is reduce. Actually, improving haul has a direct relationship with reducing pollution.

Secondly, costs of private car are very high and a person that has a car should expend more money to service the car. Not only having a good transportation system diminishes costs of the car, but also causes to save money. With a simple example I want to show a significant forwarding system. Last year I had to sell my car and after that day every day I used the shuttle bus for to go my office. Last month I realized that the metro line 3 operated, so I can use it to go my workplace faster than before. As you can see, this facility which is a part of the big technology how improves our daily works.

In conclusion, having all the reasons and examples into account, I believe that mutating haul system is the most important task for everyone which has this power to do it, because with this modifying creates suitable conditions for people to have convenient life in hometown.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... policy, culture, lack of entertainment and etc. but, I prefer to change the public tran...
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Line 3, column 767, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
..., and whereby the level of pollution is reduce. Actually, improving haul has a direct ...
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Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'saving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: saving
...ishes costs of the car, but also causes to save money. With a simple example I want to ...
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Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chnology how improves our daily works. In conclusion, having all the reasons an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76010781671 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80255797352 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544474393531 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3229331297 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.55 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111539464917 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365623241654 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437420166675 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.07504602275 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343575503365 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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