If you could go back to some time and place to live with less pollution, would you want to go? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
In my home country, the air pollution is about ten times higher than hazardous level assigned by world health community. However, half of the population is living in the city Ulaanbaatar risking their health. This air pollution is more dangerous for some group of people including infants, pregnant women elders. Especially, the unborn rate is increasing every year due to pollution. This sorrow brings us stress, unhealthy life, unhappy life. Therefore, I could go back to some time and place to live with less pollution, I would definitely go through the place with less pollution. I have three reason why I want to go back in time and live better place with clean air.
First of all, seeking for better health. Once, dalai lama said that people work for many our risking their health to earn money and then they spend a lot of money to return their health. This quote highlighting the idea that our health is the most essential concern to live. For example, in every winter, almost everyone get sick by cold and drinking many different types of antibiotics, even my 1 years old son get cold about 4 times last winter and he drank different types of antibiotics every occasion which might lead to health issue that cannot be healed by antibiotics. For this reason, I would really prefer to live the place with less pollution.
Secondly, if I mention air pollution, there are stress behind it because of illness, people’s behavior, limited time nature. Stress makes our life unhappy and decrease the chance of living fulfilled. For instance, in winter, everywhere I go I should wear protective masks, even in office or home, there should be air cleaner to breath better air. This issue limited my time to spend with family an outside; therefore, I had only one choice staying home even in weekends. If I go back to old time, I would spend time with my family more fun and less stress.
Last but not least, pollution is increasing the cost of living conversely, I am sure that in old times there would not be needed such money to live better but in polluted city, to live slightly better health, it requires a lot of things such as air cleaner, pollution filtering mask, immune improving vitamins, more chemical cleaning because of dust in the air and needfulness of car because staying in car is better for breathing cleaner air. If there was no pollution, these thing would not need for me. On average, my family spend more than we expected in winter due to polluted air. Also, it gets sick, medicine is way too expensive.
In conclusion, by concerning every angle, living in place with less pollution is better choice even going back to time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... everyone get sick by cold and drinking many different types of antibiotics, even my 1 years o...
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Line 7, column 472, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this thing' or 'these things'?
Suggestion: this thing; these things
...cleaner air. If there was no pollution, these thing would not need for me. On average, my f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77440347072 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49349783316 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507592190889 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.9516325569 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.045454545 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9545454545 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95454545455 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259710276191 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956251448172 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1344302251 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184101599536 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108732024332 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.