hese days cancer has become a dangerous threat to the world. Every year more and more people are dying because of cancer.Being a researcher, in biology field, I will invent an affordable medical diagnosis technology for cancer and its treatment as well. I have a several reasons to support my answer which I will explain below.
First of all , There are methodologies for diagnosis of cancer but not affordable to everyone. I remember one such incident. I know , a farmer who live very near by my house. He got to know that his daughter has skin cancer , she was in early stage of the disease. She could have save survided if her father could afford the medical treatment. Just becaus eof the high price of medicine and radition technology , he could not have saved her daughter. When I knew this news my heart get broke down after feeling the guilt and pain of her father. Then I decided to do the research in cancer field and invent affordable treatment.
Furthermore, I would like to convey that cancer has is now a treatable disease if it identifies in the early stage. However, problem is the diagnosis before it gets into later stage. This disease did not give any noticeable symptoms which makes it didfficult to identify. I would like to make some genetic tools to fix this problem. Knowing the genetic sequence befoe hand will be good way to know the disease. My attempt here is to making a machine which will atke blood sample from everyone and it will explain the future diseases if any body could have it. In this people get a huge time to save their life.
In conclusion, time ais very crucial for the treatment of cancer and affordability as well. There for I will do reasearch to discover the affordable and early diagnostic technique and treatment of this disease.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68789808917 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57030413608 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56050955414 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4954574558 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.089190186484 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272770516853 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260255801599 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0521014382719 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201696743658 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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