If you could invent something, what would you invent? Give specific reasons as to why your invention would be important.
These days cancer has become a dangerous threat to the world. Every year more and more people are dying because of cancer. Being a researcher, in the biology field, I will invent an affordable medical diagnosis technology for cancer and its treatment as well. I have several reasons to support my answer which I will explain below.
First of all, There are methodologies for diagnosis of cancer but not affordable to everyone. I remember one such incident. I know, a farmer who lives very nearby my house. He got to know that his daughter has skin cancer, she was in the early stage of the disease. She could have to save survived if her father could afford medical treatment. Just because of the high price of medicine and radiation technology, he could not have saved her daughter. When I knew this news my heart gets broken down after feeling the guilt and pain of her father. Then I decided to do the research in the cancer field and invent affordable treatment.
Furthermore, I would like to convey that cancer has is now a treatable disease if it identifies in the early stage. However, a problem is the diagnosis before it gets into the later stage. This disease did not give any noticeable symptoms which makes it difficult to identify. I would like to make some genetic tools to fix this problem. Knowing the genetic sequence befoe hand will be good way to know the disease. My attempt here is to make a machine which will take a blood sample from everyone and it will explain the future diseases if anybody could have it. In this people get a huge time to save their life.
In conclusion, time is very crucial for the treatment of cancer and affordability as well. Therefore I will do research to discover the affordable and early diagnostic technique and treatment of this disease.
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70347003155 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54575109744 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548895899054 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5375990199 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.0 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0952380952 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0927133130389 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0262389247847 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352540143003 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0513651008173 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303078811636 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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