If you have to choose one of those options, which one you will choose? 1 | Job close to home (20 mins away) | $1500 p/month2 | Job far away from home (2 hrs away) | $3000 p/month3 | Job at home | $900 p/month

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If you have to choose one of those options, which one you will choose? 1 | Job close to home (20 mins away) | $1500 p/month
2 | Job far away from home (2 hrs away) | $3000 p/month
3 | Job at home | $900 p/month

People have different points of view regarding how to spend their time and regarding the amount of money they would like to earn. For me, if I have to choose between those three options, I will definitely choose working from home with earning $900. I will explore the reasons that made me choose this particular opinion.
The first reason is related to the fact that working from home will save me time. I can utilize this time doing multiple things, like, studying and spending time with my family. For example, I am a working from home mother, also, a student at Paradise Valley Community College. I usually finish my work early in the morning before my children even wake up and then I spend much time playing with them, after that, I do my homework at night, after they go to sleep. So, if I am working away from home, I will spend less time with my kids and waste much time in the roads. In addition, it will help me avoid road accidents. Those that can happened to anyone driving a car. So, as long as I am at home I am safe.
Another reason is associated with the earning. The fact that I am working from home and earning only $900, actually fits me, because, I see that there is no need for more money as long as my husband is working, and he is the one who pays the bills. Furthermore, I am, in fact, staying with my kids. Which means no money required for their daycare, because I am taking care of them. For example, a day care in my city, Tutor Time, asks for a weekly payment of $300, which is so expensive. Thus, staying with my children, and taking care of them will save me so much money. That’s why $900 will be fine for me.
As a conclusion, Working from home and receiving $900 is the best option for me, because it will save me time to study and to be with my family. Also, the pay that I will receive will be enough as long as my husband is working, and it will save me the day care expenses, since I am taking care of my children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to work'.
Suggestion: to work
...three options, I will definitely choose working from home with earning 00. I will explo...
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Line 2, column 671, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t can happened to anyone driving a car. So, as long as I am at home I am safe. Anothe...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, thus, for example, in addition, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.208 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22526902244 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474666666667 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9221429604 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.9 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158611727559 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611974015665 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622497023553 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115043747043 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429756685679 0.0645574589148 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.14 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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