If you make one important change in a school that you attend, what change would you make?
It goes without saying that schools and universities play a decisive role in individuals and society's progress. What is the essential factor that has significant effects on these centers' developments is a very challenging issue? If I had a chance to change something in my previous school, I would hire more diligent and experienced teachers. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my point of view.
Firstly, teachers have a remarkable impact on students' academic performance. Teachers have very prominent missions and roles in schools. They are responsible for taking all their energy and knowledge into account to teach students (or they must use all their energy and knowledge to teach and train students). Their experience would help them to choose the best and appropriate methods based on class level. In addition, their knowledge as a robust tool makes them able to transfer an adequate amount of information to students. On the other hand, if they have not these abilities, students will not be well educated in their fields. Moreover, students' familiarity with their courses helps them to be more successful in the future. Nowadays, one of the most critical elements that employees consider when they want to hire a person is their background in their field. Thus, the teachers' role in students' success is undeniable.
Furthermore, adults, especially teachers, have a vital impact on students' behavior. Young people are seeking to find a person as their idol. Students spend most of their time in school with their friends and teachers. It is evident that they tend to follow their teachers' manner and behavior. So, teachers must to be careful and considerate with their words and acts in a class. It is needless to say these young students after graduation from schools and universities will be hired in companies or they will take an eligible position in their country. How they react in school should be considered by teachers. If they do not learn how to communicate with others, they will not be prosperous in their future life. Therefore, schools must consider the teachers' characteristics as an imperative factor for their recruitment.
To wrap it up, I am of the opinion that hiring experienced and knowledgeable teachers are very critical for the progress of both the students and society. Not only do they strongly affect students' knowledge, but also they have a significant impact on students' behavior. It is highly recommended that universities and schools contemplate these factors as requirements in teachers' employment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 877, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...ir background in their field. Thus, the teachers role in students success is undeniable....
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Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...cially teachers, have a vital impact on students behavior. Young people are seeking to f...
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Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...chers manner and behavior. So, teachers must to be careful and considerate with their w...
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Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... also they have a significant impact on students behavior. It is highly recommended that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1884057971 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91815831872 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6386274221 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.92 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.56 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0563947781963 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0189866528447 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292234529362 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0444785068722 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355596328756 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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