If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
International exhibitions are important worldwide because they represent different cultures and help us to understand and assimilate a little of the traditions, history, or characteristics of other countries. My country, Chile, has a captivating history and is culturally enriched by the diversity of ethnicities you can find in it. If I had to choose an object to represent my cherished land in another country, I would choose a Moai, which is a sculpture made in Easter Island.
First of all, by exposing a Moai, people will know that Easter Island is part of Chile due to the fact that Moai sculptures were produced on that island many centuries ago. It is not well known that Chile is a tricontinental country, and by this, I mean that it owns territory in South America, Antarctica and in some islands in the Pacific Ocean, such as the Easter, Robinson Crusoe, and Juan Fernandez Islands. This variety in the lands that my country owns definitely enriches the Chilean culture and makes it more attractive for tourism. For example, I have known many foreigners that have been living in Chile who have had a strong desire to visit Easter Island. But ironically, they had not known that this island belongs to Chile until I told it to them.
Second, people may be amazed by the history behind Moais. These artworks made of volcanic rocks by aboriginal tribes are a complete mystery. We still do not know how these individuals could move these heavy creations from the place where they were sculpted to the place where they were found. There are many hypotheses, such as complex mechanisms of nodes and huge wagons made of light woods. But there is no certainty about them.
Third, by learning about the Moais, people will want to visit the Island because of its astonishing landscapes. Easter Island has many paradisiacal beaches and inactive volcanoes which tourists love to visit. The most popular place is the Anga Roa volcano which is a huge caldera that now is a lake in the top of a hill, surrounded by exotic vegetation.
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Essay evaluation report
Sorry, e-grader scores badly sometimes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1642 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.718 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.729 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, still, third, well, for example, i mean, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86494252874 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71665122586 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3310524801 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8125 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0638907101556 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0189695214276 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322140886944 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0416610778741 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503543051772 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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