If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice

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If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition, what would you choose? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice

If I were asked to send one thing representing my country to an international exhibition, I would choose to send my project that I am developing about time-space travelling.
Firstly, I am sure that my project would delight everyone in the exhibition. Many people love to know the possibility to travel back in time. For instance, I remember when a friend of mine told me that if he could, he would go back in time to fix some mistakes that he has been made. Therefore, everyone would change the way of living.
Secondly, I would become renown and make a lot of dollars. For example, people might buy my project and devise the machine to travel back in time. Furthermore, I love to become famous and recognized by my works as Isaac Newton and Albert Einstein were in the past.
Moreover, my country would be seen as a brilliant brain country. As an example, it would attract international students and scientists to perform works in it. Also, it might grow exponentially in science development and many international investitors could invest in it to become a strong country in science.
Finally, choosing my project to an international exhibition could give my country the opportunuty to be a worldwide power and could give me the chance to be famous and rich.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1047.0 1977.66487455 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 219.0 407.700716846 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78082191781 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95141817571 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 212.727598566 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529680365297 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 618.680645161 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4769255532 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.25 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179667264057 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679644815977 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828281110802 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120838810448 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106063352528 0.0645574589148 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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