Imagine that there is a large piece of vacant land in your town What is the best way to make use of it Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

I live in a town with a very small space even we do not have space to park our cars. If there is a large piece of vacant land in my town, I absolutely will use in some specific areas. I believe that this vacant land will use in the best way if we make a great park with a lot of facility, school and kindergarten and a football pitch.
Firstly, park is very necessary for our town because our people do not have a place for exercise. Everyone needs exercise to have fit and healthy body. But, unfortunately we do not have such a place to exercise there, so I think building a park is necessity for our town. For example, I used to wake up early in the morning and I was running in the street, however after a few weeks I realized that this exercise will harm to my body more than profit because i was running in streets with the pollution air. because of this reason i think building a park is necessity for our town.
Secondly, in our area there is no school and kindergarten for children. Children go to far away schools and this is a big problem for their parents and themselves because it will waste the parent's time, also the children will be boor to travel a long way to go to school. I think having a school and kindergarten in every town is an obligation. because of this reason i believe having a school and kindergarten in our town is a necessity.
Thirdly, As I see most of my peers including me is interest in football and basketball. We play football in parking lot between cars and it is very harmful and dangerous for us. Last year, my friend was injured because his hand was knocked to the car's window. I believe most of my peers have a good talent in sport, however they cannot practice and show it because of absence of football and other sports pitch. I highly recommend building a sport pitch is the best way to use from the vacant place.
In conclusion, i think the best way to use from the vacant land is building a park, school, and a sport pitch because of the reasons I mentioned above.

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Average: 6.6 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.24484536082 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45762660424 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435567010309 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7465255856 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166144200525 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696661444794 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094593531189 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12991349028 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977714147653 0.0645574589148 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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