Imagine that you are a student at a university where there are long breaks between semesters. The university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break.
a. Students must take a course which has no direct connection to their major (for example, students majoring in engineering take a course in fine arts or social sciences)
b. Students must volunteer to work on a project in their university’s city or hometown to improve some aspect of life in the city or hometown. For example, a student can work with primary school children who need help with their homework.
Which one do you prefer? Present reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an English proverb that says, ''Make hay, while the sun shines,'' which has to do with the fact that one should utilize any encountered situation in order to make progress in one's personal life. According to this proverb, university students should make use of each opportunity which is provided for them during the break, whether it would be taking an irrelevant course or being volunteered for working on a project. I subscribe to the latter option as it will bring about invaluable experiences which will have a conspicuous impact on students' future life.
Regarding the importance of experience in today's modern world, with its galloping progress, it is widely believed that any individual should broaden one's knowledge in his or her major by practical training which is obtained through doing some part-time job related to their field of study. When one does some jobs like teaching assistant or teaching students who need some help in order to improve their lessons, not only can he or she put this in their CVs which will reveal a big impact on their upper level of education, but they will be occupied in prestigious job positions in the upcoming future as well. It may be true that learning an irrelevant course such as art or social science can lead to prosper in future, but it is not as effective as working experience. Additionally, enjoying the very experiences paves the way for becoming self-confident since one considers one's-self will be beneficial for the society, and this will unconsciously affect their tendency to work better in their future jobs.
Another privilege of this opportunity is concerned with the society. First, university students, by doing this part-time job, help local population improve their lessons which will directly have an impact on society's improvement because of enhancing public educational level. Moreover, by doing so, university will be increased in value among local population and as a result not only will the university as well as students be respected more, but also science and knowledge improvement will be valued more. Apart from this, participating young members beside experienced members in society will improve the performance of the infrastructure projects and will result in better outcomes which are not achieved by attending just art or social classes. Any individual should do something in order to make a better society rather doing something simply to pass his or her leisure time.
In conclusion, by taking all these into account, I believe that having a part-time job during the break is more preferable in comparison with taking a course which is not related to one's major because the former one provide job opportunities, working experiences, as well as respect, all of which are crucial for any student to find a decent job in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...t or social science can lead to prosper in future, but it is not as effective as working ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...al for any student to find a decent job in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, apart from, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2358.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08189655172 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8039613084 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515086206897 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.2290227231 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.384615385 100.406767564 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.6923076923 20.6045352989 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0769230769 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227947052518 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845971391103 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711556185316 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170126029575 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679186284242 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 11.7677419355 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.1575268817 166% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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