Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this land?
I would like to use my land for everybody's sake such as a useful and attractive place for children young, adults, and elders. There is no place provides such as quantity of different activities in my city. It could be a convenient area for outdoor activities, calmer environments, and meeting points for everybody.
There are not various outdoor activities such as camping, rock climbing, yoga, swimming, theme parks etc. We have only one open-air swimming pool and it is quite small for inhabitants of the city. These various opportunities would contribute increasing advantages of our city. The theme parks also fantastic place to be in there.
People who get exhausting from outdoor activities, they could have a rest in calmer places to get relax and rest as well. Jacuzzi, hammam, sauna, swimming pool would be included in SPA. The entrance of SPA is so expensive in my city but in that place, it could be suitable for all budget of people. Also, libraries are fabulous places to purify from the external world. Concerning people's desires and expectations, cinema is also a place that requires being calm.
In my town, there are a lot of small cafes and restaurants to drink and eat something while chilling with friends. But they are quite expensive for young especially if they are students. I would make it these restaurants and cafes less expensive and with so many discounts for students. In that cases, it would entertain more people. We don't have the opportunity to chill or meet with friends in the places which could be for sitting, having picnics, of bringing the children. The diversity of parks with swings, seesaws, slides etc. It could be better to meet in free places for some part of residents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 292.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89383561644 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67009766886 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541095890411 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4421178344 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.2105263158 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3684210526 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.05263157895 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0766407141302 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0244260257725 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416220597813 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0510674383877 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322349321295 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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