Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish How would you use this land Use specific details to explain your answer

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Imagine that you have received some land to use as you wish. How would you use this land? Use specific details to explain your answer.

In the case I had received a piece of land and I had the chance to use it as I want, I would plan to do two main projects.

The first one involves the construction of area for indoor and outdoor activities, that would allow myself and my offspring to practice some sports and have fun in our free time. For instance, I would build many boulders to climb with my family and to improve our skills all together. Furthermore, I would construct two swimming pools in the garden: one to have some relax (a big jacuzzi) and another one to do some activity. In order to make some big parties and to entertain my children and their friends I would also build some rollercoasters. These ones not only would provide a great fun to young and old people but also it would make possible to have an extraordinary view on the close crops from the top of the structures.

In addition, I would focus my attention on having km 0 foods. As a matter of fact, I would take care personally of a big garden of fruits and vegetables. Having these plants not only would be a benefit for myself, but also for my family and friends who would be able to have access to fresh food every time they wish to. In addition, I would buy some animals such as chickens, turkeys and rabbits that would be grown up and eventually killed in order to provide a high quality meat. In the land I would also have a cow, to drink fresh milk every morning.

Moreover, this piece of land will be accessible not only to my family and friend, but also to the public. Indeed, people who would like to visit my incredible property would be able to do it, just paying a cheap fee. However, it would be open to public just two days a week, in order to maintain a level of privacy and of peace during other days.

In conclusion, if I was that lucky to receive a piece of land to modify as I want, I would have a plan ready to be put into action. My project would have two main features. First, it would host many areas to practice sports (a boulder and a professional swimming pool) and to have some fun (a big jacuzzi and some rollercoasters). In addition, it would have a big garden not only with fresh vegetables and fruits, but also with animals to provide fresh meat and milk.

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Average: 7.2 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: THESE_ONES[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'These' instead.
Suggestion: These
...I would also build some rollercoasters. These ones not only would provide a great fun to y...
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Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'high quality meat'.
Suggestion: high quality meat
...d eventually killed in order to provide a high quality meat. In the land I would also have a cow, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.29146919431 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44749105902 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452606635071 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3467367871 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.611111111 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4444444444 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18351554895 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702970537588 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375070170503 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122272334962 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356141401667 0.0645574589148 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.9 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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